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I have no idea how to make this photo more interesting.
So you can judge me!
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Your model is fantastic, but the photo is good.

Coming from a non-professional my critic does not go beyond an opinion of one person, to be discarded if you feel like it.

A few things to notice:

The background is incomplete – the wall does not cover the whole space and is not monotonous, so it does not work as the girl against a crude wall theme, one often sees in magazines. It gives no volume, no light, no texture, and screams for replacement.

At this point the reader needs to brace himself as writing anything with a tint of grey about Ksu is a major crime.

Here Ksu parades a bit assets first – models tend to discharge the picture by tilting shoulders, raising one arm and myriads of other little tricks, which ultimately make them … models. In all honesty, the picture should have taken her up to waist, otherwise her braid is cropped – the viewer remains tormented where it ends.

Your comment to the portrait is ironic. Truly, anyone would be hard pressed to make Ksu’s shot more interesting, but there are ways to make it better as a photograph.
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The-Port-of-Riches Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014  Hobbyist Filmographer
Photogenic!
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Tedebair79 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
those lips! my goodness. yes!
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CreeppingDeath Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Student Digital Artist
awwww, what a gorgeous photograph and the model :love:
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:iconyulchanyan:
YulchaNyan Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
^_^ thanks!
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Josiah-Black Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013  Student General Artist
great picture the angle compliment you.
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:icondeviantgrrrls:
deviantgrrrls Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013
LOVE!!!
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:iconcloud2493:
cloud2493 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013
simple and beautiful
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Adrolyn Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Goodness. Those are like the prettiest lips on the planet.

More interesting? That probably would require another person walking by in the shot behind you, slightly blurred, preferably looking in your direction.
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:iconyulchanyan:
YulchaNyan Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
(it's not me)
Thank you ^_^ Another person... Yes) It would be interesting
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:iconacsher:
Acsher Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
This is an amazing photo! Great job! You have captured so much emtoion and feeling in it (for me, at least). Impressed.
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:iconyulchanyan:
YulchaNyan Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you very much for the comment! I really appreciate your words
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:iconacsher:
Acsher Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013
Oh, you are very welcome. Thanks for getting back to me.
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BenHammonds Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013   Writer
This young lady has such a remarkable look, her face shape and structure is so very pretty, poetic I think. Her dark hair is so beautiful, there would be no way to make this image any more interesting!! :) WONDERFUL WORK, hello from Texas
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:iconyulchanyan:
YulchaNyan Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you so much from both of us! :)
Greetings from Russia! :)
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BenHammonds Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013   Writer
I am so happy with your greetings :) You are very welcome my fiends :) Hope you might stop by my page sometime, I have my written works on there :) Your works are very amazing to see.
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:iconyulchanyan:
YulchaNyan Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Surely! thanks for the invitation, I'm very interested :)
I'll visit your page as soon as I can :)
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:iconbenhammonds:
BenHammonds Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013   Writer
Im glad, you are always welcome my new friend :)
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:iconjarofcomics:
JarOfComics Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
the model makes the photo interesting enough :)
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:iconyulchanyan:
YulchaNyan Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
:)
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Chaosfive-55 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconawwplz: Simply beautiful!
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wolfguard007 Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012
this is a very nice photo
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:iconyulchanyan:
YulchaNyan Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you :)
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Alien-Exile Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't think it needs to be more interesting, it's a wonderful shot, and such a beautiful model.
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MTS-Photo Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2012
soooo wonderful!
great

thank you :blowkiss:
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:iconyulchanyan:
YulchaNyan Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
^__^
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Deveneta Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2012  Professional Filmographer
One word : PERFECTION !
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:iconnignag:
NigNag Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012
Beautiful facial features. Eyes and lips to die for
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srefislimited Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2012   Photographer
She looks just like the young Lara Croft in the new Tomb Raider game they are coming out with next year. Very pretty, I like the milky bokeh in the background and her features are striking contrast to it. :)
Good job!
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:iconyulchanyan:
YulchaNyan Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you very much for the comment! :)
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srefislimited Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012   Photographer
You're very welcome :) please keep making beautiful art.
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:iconyulchanyan:
YulchaNyan Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I'll try :)
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Leinad-Odelot Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2012
She is reallygorgeous
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Freakastar Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2012  Student Interface Designer
is its just me, or does she have the lips of Angelina Jolie? :meow:
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:iconyulchanyan:
YulchaNyan Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Hm... I think, that Ksusha's lips are better :D
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Freakastar Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2012  Student Interface Designer
hehe..... I have to agree on that :D
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YulchaNyan Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
:D
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DerekRaymondPhotos Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2012  Professional Photographer
If you want to crop at all, I'd take off just a little bit on the left, to add a bit of an asymmetrical aspect. Keep in mind the rule of thirds. I do very much enjoy the shot just as it is, however.
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:iconyulchanyan:
YulchaNyan Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Ok, thank you for the advice! :)
I'll try to do it immediately.
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MarsupialRogue Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Maybe crop the photo left of her shoulder to change the composition? I think you'll like it.

Remember the Rule of Threes. It's true in illustration and photography.
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YulchaNyan Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Ok, thank you for the comment. :)
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Thejpshow15 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
actually very nice picture here real simple and quint i like it
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YulchaNyan Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you! :)
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